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English Exams [Oct. 1st, 2011|10:31 pm]
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[Current Location |Singapore, Singapore]
[mood |productive]
[music |Spanish Sahara - Foals]

Hi I started my journal because I'm less than a month away from my O levels and I NEED to do well for my English exams. I thought that maybe I could post compositions (mostly narratives and descriptive ones) from prompts (which would be lovely to come from you people) written within 50 minutes, and you could help me in grammar work, style, and point out places on which I can improve.

I'll make sure to not use spell/grammar check.

I haven't posted in my journal yet so it would be absolutely wonderful if I could get some writing prompts from you. Thank you very much in advance!
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Less than wholely platonic relationships... [Mar. 4th, 2008|11:33 pm]
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Ok, just trying to figure out if this "feels" off to anyone.
Our MCs are a pair of young women (in their 20s, in modern-day US). I shall, for convenience, refer to them as A and B.
A is cheerfully bisexual, cheerfully and enthusiastically promiscuous, and quietly in lust with (or possibly even in love with) B.
B is nigh unto asexual (still a virgin, has gone on maybe 2 dates in her entire life--and not because of religious beliefs or whatever, just because of lack of interest/time).
A and B have known each other since kindergarten or so, and have been Best Friends for years. They are currently traveling together (A is exhibiting her paintings in galleries around the country, B is Killing Evil Things)
The situation I'm not sure about the "rightness" of:
B knows that A would cheerfully jump her bones, A knows that B isn't interested in having her bones jumped by A (to the extent that she's not asexual, she's probably heterosexual). But other than the occasional "Just in case you've changed your mind" token advance from A, and some effort on B's part not to "tease", this is Not An Issue between them. Not in the sense of "This is a suppressed thing we Just Don't Talk About", but in the sense of "This is how things are, such is life, *shrug*". If I'm making any sense.
Does this seem emotionally unrealistic to anyone?
(if anyone's still actually reading this comm)
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prospective NCIS case... [Apr. 15th, 2007|02:59 pm]
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[mood |blankslightly pathetic]

My brain's trying to randomly fanfic, but I can't seem to think of a decent NCIS-worthy case that could reasonably involve, as a Key Witness, a 12-year-old girl who's the granddaughter/foster daughter of a retired Marine. Bonus points if she and/or her family are hurt, but not maimed/killed, in the incident. Doesn't have to be one where she would normally be a *useful* witness, she's--a little unusual.
I'd greatly appreciate any suggestions.
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How to write redemption? [Sep. 21st, 2006|11:05 pm]
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I am cutting this because this deals with such tricky matters as domestic abuse and rape; please excercise caution.

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New Community [Jun. 5th, 2006|10:14 pm]
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Hello there,
I would like to make notice of a new writing community me and my friends are in the process of creating at paper_Identity with dozens of writing options and guarenteed literary feedback from the Mods.
So feel free to join :)

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Romance tropes... [Jun. 5th, 2006|01:46 am]
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I'm having a vague plot idea sparked by mention of some sort of contest kinda thing for "paranormal romance novels"... but I don't, personally, read romance novels. And don't care to, I have enough sci fi and fantasy sitting around begging for my attention.
Any particular pointers/resources for figuring out the tropes of the romance genre, short of reading a whole bunch of the stupid things? Other than, ya know, varying degrees of softcore pornography [g], I'm not sure what generally actually *happens* in a romance novel.
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Here I go again (This is a satire).... [May. 12th, 2006|10:13 pm]
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The Soft Sell: How to be a racist today


The days are over when you could just tell it like it is. Thank Hitler and Mussolini for guarding public susceptibility against such straightforward logic as, “our race is superior, suppress the others”. And confound that Martin Luther King for leading the movement that put an end to structural discrimination. You can’t even get a job in today’s world without signing a clause that binds you into a no-racism policy.


But fear not my prejudiced friend! Society is not as sanctimonious and equality driven as you might suspect, to the savvy and determined racists amongst you there many avenues of release to be found.


Take the BNP, by now you’re surely aware of their recent success in local elections. How did they pull that one off? Well Labour incompetence and populist fear of terrorism have certainly proved helpful but credit can also be found in verbal dexterity. Check out their website. The BNP claim their policies are not racist and that actually, multicultural enthusiasts are the racist ones. Genius! It doesn’t make any sense but that’s ok.


 The ability to shroud your bigotry in nebulous rhetoric is a must-have skill for any ambitious racist. It serves the triple purpose of shutting up amateur critics, sending encoded messages to your noble comrades and even enlisting the support of those so confused by today’s world that they’ll back you despite not understanding you. Brilliant! Once you’ve got the knack of spin, you’ll be able to get away with all kinds of outrages. Just look at out current prime minister! 


Getting yourself into a position of political influence is one option but not for everyone. This is fortunate because we need to fight equality from within as well as without. For as long as discrimination in the workplace is occurring the minorities will know they can’t relax.  They might get a new-age employer but who knows, they might not! It’s important to keep them slightly paranoid and unable to relax. The brilliant thing about all the noise that’s been made about discrimination in the work place is that it’s desensitised many bored non-racists to the real thing. As long as you’re subtle, you can victimise those scabby immigrants to your hearts content.


What you gotta realise is that people don’t care that much about racism anymore; they care about violence and crime and other such crude expressions of opinion. When it comes to the theories of racial difference, a lot of people are willing to listen. Do you remember Dr Ellis of Leeds University? That guy really went for it; grounding his belief in repatriation in, “The Bell Curve” theory, and other pseudo-academic nonsense. The only reason he got suspended was that he didn’t know when to call it a day, that guy would not shut up! Take heart my Machiavellian xenophobes; a little restraint goes a long way.


In conclusion, anti-racism has already burned in the spotlight and now, as an issue, its passé. The time is ripe for us racists to stage a revival, but to be successful in doing so we must call it by a different name. Selling your ideas is all about image and the term “Racist” has a certain stigma attached to it, give your prejudices a makeover. Dress your racism in soft colours, say in front of the mirror, “I’m not prejudiced I’m just concerned” or “I’m just going on academic findings”. People are worried about jobs, housing and general security so incorporate compassion for these fears into you repartee. To appeal to intellectual pretensions, cite cross cultural studies. Those who aren’t scared of multiculturalism are complacent about it so use your imagination! There’s no reason to rest on your laurels, my dear racist friends, get out there and spread your insinuating messages of hate.

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Book review of The Virgin Suicides by Jeffrey Eugenides [May. 11th, 2006|03:17 am]
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My opinion: It has it's moment but mainly is quite rambling and not that readable. It's not quite finished yet either
Constructive criticism would be thoroughly welcomed!

The Virgin Suicides tells the story of the five Lisbon girls who live out most of their short adolescence under house arrest in leafy suburbia. Their portraits are painted from the perspective of the neighbourhood boys who were infatuated and hoard, visually and literally, every available scrap of the girls’ lives.


(Exhibits #13-#15) Therese’s chemistry write-ups, Bonnie’s history paper on Simone Weil, Lux’s frequent forged excuses from phys.  ed…(101)


The book begins with the attempted suicide of the youngest, thirteen year old Cecilia, and ends with the middle sister Mary, reciprocating successfully. The interim is a montage of the girls’ secluded yet distinct lives and how they captured, and perhaps prescribed, the frustrated languor of the boys’ adolescence. The montage is assembled with the utmost attentiveness yet despite having observed the most intimate details about the girls ….Peter Sissen found Mary Lisbon’s secret cache of cosmetics tied up in a sock under the sink: tubes of red lipstick and the second skin of blush and base, and the depilatory wax that informed us she had a moustache we had never seen…the narrative is still characterised by their inability to know the Lisbon sisters or to understand exactly what it was that drove them to take their lives.


 The occasions on which the boys get direct access to the objects of their adoration amount to two. The first is after Cecilia’s attempted suicide when the resident psychiatrist, Dr Hornicker, suggests that she would benefit from more socialising. In accordance with his advice, Mr and Mrs Lisbon relax their rules and allow the girls a chaperoned party. In the second instance, Trip Fontaine, the school heart throb, negotiates Homecoming dates for the four remaining girls. Both of these occasions end in disaster: respectively Cecilia’s suicide and Lux staying out all night with Trip. Consequences which only serve to intensify the isolation in which the girls are kept (They are taken out of school after Homecoming)

 However on these rare occasions the girls are shown to be playful and, given the inscrutability that has grown around them, surprisingly normal. It is the persistence of these characteristics that lifts you into believing in and empathising with the boys in their attachment to life-loving girls at odds with circumstance.

 The narrative is not built on tension; the climax is inevitable, revealed as it is in the first line; but on the kind of scrutiny that accounts not only for detail but also for atmosphere. It is twenty years on from the suicides when the boys piece together their recall yet the days are thick with summer and the visceral sense invasions of what it means to be very much alive.

  The prose style is lyrical and has a momentum that carries you through death and despair with such a wry and light step that you never get bogged down in the subject matter. This is probably because The Virgin Suicides is a love story before it is a study of suicide. The focus is never on the absences and emptiness that are at the core of self destruction but on the charm and allure of the girls. The suicides are most significant insofar as they break the boys’ hearts.

It didn’t matter in the end how old they had been, or that they were girls, but only that we had loved them and they hadn’t heard us calling, still do not hear us, up here in the tree house with our thinning hair and soft bellies calling them out of those rooms where they went to be alone for all time, alone in suicide, which is deeper than death, and where we will never find the pieces to put them back together.

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I need a job. [Apr. 7th, 2006|07:09 am]
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I think I've spammed Little Details enough with this one [g]. Hither, yon, and thus.
I think Our Heroine needs a different job than I've given her.
The job needs to be something she can do while traveling very randomly (interdimensionally, in fact), in no particular pattern. She needs to be able to physically carry all of her possessions at once, and if the prior posts are anything to go by, the basic requirements for, y'know, survival will take up most of her reasonable weight allowance. It needs to be a job where she can spend the majority of her time traveling rather than working per se (or, at least, rather than staying in one place working). And the job needs to be as culture-free as possible (ie not minstrel or scribe or something similar), but useful in pretty much any medieval-ish culture.

I was originally going to make her a tinker, jewelry-maker, and trader in small light things (ribbons, spices, etc). She can still do the latter two (the jewelry making is just bead-and-wirework stuff, so the Stuff for it is maybe 2 or 3 pounds at *most*), but it's looking like the Stuff for tinker work (see "thus") is just too damned heavy. And, given her random patterns and such, I doubt she could make enough from just trading in bead jewelry, ribbons, shiny things, and small quantities of spices.
So, any suggestions for a profession or two for Our Heroine? The more "practical" and hand-craft-y the better.
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Issues involved in attempted rape [Mar. 18th, 2006|10:05 pm]
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